Monday, February 7, 2011

silent thoughts

beyond time and land,
I wanted to wander hand in hand.
the flawless smile I saw so often,
always made my wrinkled brow soften.
I shared my smiles and shared your tears,
every single day spent alone feels like a year.
I know in my heart somewhere
even with you not around I'll always receive your care.

12 comments:

  1. Ahem.. A love poem.. Well short and sweet did the trick, the last line especially.. :) Kudos!

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  2. first attempt ..old thoughts remember its the unknown pretenses i'll be exposing here :)

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  3. Sweet and senti :) ~Rach

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  4. Nice!

    Anyone in particular this poem was dedicated to? :)

    Did you by any chance mean to say, "spent alone" instead of "spent together"? :D

    "every single day spent together feels like a year."

    'Cuz if a moment felt like a year, then better avoid any such company! :P

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  5. umm donno ..i just wrote it..was merely paying attention to the rhyming ending ...

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  6. Rappu! <3 i dint know you do the beautiful wali poetry too despite of that our madness wali :D

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  7. do u still call urself the worst poet? ;-)

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  8. Personally not a big fan of sad poems but this was good.

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  9. Sounds like a "MJ" song ;) #GetTheHint

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  10. seriousness from dubeyji! #EPIC!

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  11. Loved this .. sooper dooper sweet :))
    And dare you stop blogging now .. waiting for many more verses and tales ...

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  12. Not many words were said but you explained so much in few lines.. spilling thoughts and feelings through poetry can only do so much...anyways great write nicely put together. keep posting :)

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